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hey there, it was amazing but i am not sure the characters would do anything you mantioned back there. my overall saying : alittle not hermoineishbut rons dialogue was very ...

heythere, this is the first time that i am seeing your work cause i am new. i love harry potter and doing this story with the epilogue was brilliant. please ...

That was Rowlingish!! Well done! The writing style was very fine-so much like the books. The story was good too. But I feel that it was a bit vague. I ...

the first thing i would say is yuck ! how could you ? harry potter series is one of the best books and i really hate what you just open. ...

It has potential. The story line was good, and it's left me eagerly awaiting the next installment. My only suggestions are use more description and proof read it a few ...

this was definetely better than the other chapters. looks like you have a hold of things now. ussualy my case is that i do welll in the first chapter and ...

now this chapter was what i think the best. if the chapter is long then te readers get engrossed, and thats what we all read for don't we ? few ...

this chapter was not soo great. although don't stop, keep on writing. we all learn through mistakes right ? the few things i would recomend is that make it a ...

here it flows : - "...And to all those juniors and seniors out there, please be safe this 'break! And responsible. Having a license doesn't make you any older..." exactly ...

what can i say, this is the one. look for these things though : - "You can leave, now." The attendant scurried away. you should have put 'said' after since ...

i love it. look forward to the next chapter. please notify me when it comes out. few things i saw : - "Hannah Erins! a period instead. - "Wow! Really!" ...

nice enough but you kind of used the 'i' word too much. try describe the things she sees alittle more. example : describe the bus, describe her house etc.... like ...

since you are a senior writer obiviously you write so well but this was ust too good. i could never write like that. few things : - Actually, it was ...

well, what have we here, another work of schasa. an exellent piece, really. *applaudes* this was great, you really got me into it. a agree with the other reviewers, it ...

sorry to say this since you are new to this site and all but it really seemed like narnia. most of us here already know what might happen next so ...